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It’s late in the evening and my heroine, Lily, is being escorted home by police after a brutal attack by a wanted gang leader.
Lily averted her gaze from the sidewalk and focused on Chase unlocking her door. She remained vertical by sheer force of will, desperate to get inside. Even with Chase and Mike stuck to her like burrs, the whispering breeze carried threats. The shadows hid monsters threatening to break through their guard. Paranoia bloomed.
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I like it. I like the building tension to the last line, “Paranoia bloomed.” Very nice.
Thanks, Kyoko. I liked the idea of it blooming and spreading and invading every nook and cranny.
Great tension-filled six.
Thanks, Paula. I wanted a certain feel for the opening of this particular chapter.
Very nice build with the sentence structure until that last punchy line. Great six!
Thanks, Kate. I love playing with sentence structure.
Excellent job conveying her stress and building tension. I started feeling anxious for her.
Thanks, Corrine. I had to listen to some dark, edgy music to get where I needed to be to write this scene.
Looking forward to reading this book! I love the storyline.
Thanks, Wildcat’s Wife! I hope you enjoy it and that you let me know what you think of it!
Ooh! That made me shiver in sympathy. Great six, Karyn!
Thanks, Kate. I couldn’t have asked for a nicer compliment 🙂
Great job of conveying her feelings. Love the line about the shadows hiding “monsters.” I can sense her fear and exhaustion!
Thanks, Mae Clair. This scene went through many revisions until I got it to the place I wanted it to be.
This six weeps anxiety and tension. Well done!
Thanks for the awesome compliment, Candice!
Love your six! Great tension. Very ominous.
Thanks, Lorraine. I spent a lot of time trying to get it right and trying to convey her sense of desolation.
Oh, Karyn! This just gets better and better. I love the dark, brooding feel to this scene. Shivery!
Thanks, Silver! I’m glad it had the appropriate effect and it had that dark and brooding tone to it!
I love the feel of this. The tension is palpable and your description of it is perfect! Great 6!
Thanks, L.J! I rewrote it many times, until I came up with the idea of paranoia blooming and taking over.
Great snippet, which is showing the beginning of the PTSD she will have from this…
Thanks, Angela. And yes, she’s just had her sense of security ripped from her – she’ll never be the same person she was before!
Love the prickliness you conveyed with ‘burrs’. It’s a great word choice and slides us into her ‘blooming’ paranoia. Great six!
Thanks, Monica! I’m glad the two things worked together to add to the tension.
Her feelings seem so authentic following what she’s been through. Really great job of capturing this moment of fear and exhaustion!
Thanks, Sarah! I’m glad her sense of powerlessness came through!
Great six! Loved “the whispering breeze carried threats” part. Gave a very dark feel to those six sentences!
Thanks, Christina! I’m glad the dark feeling was there and created the right mood.
Intriguing and suspenseful six! Loved it!
Thanks, Jennifer! I love writing suspense!!
Yikes… what a tension building scene that is. Kudos!!
Thanks, JoAnne!!!!